Gooduklady, thankyou for your feedback, however i disagree. i may have tons of spelling errors and structural erros and blah blah blah, but its my first draft my job was to keep people wanting more, and i think i've filled that postion perfectly. and as for my sexual scenes? humdrum? i think they're anything but! it got your pulse racing(:
Unfortunately, this is not even erotica, in my opinion. I think it needs to have an "X" rating on it so that minors do not read it (even though YOU are a minor yourself). Content is not appropriate for youngsters.
Your writing? I shall be brutally frank. Poorly written. Tons of grammar, spelling and structural errors. Plot line flimsy. Sexual scenes - humdrum.
You obviously have a wish to write. Why not write something... Show more
Hi, have u finished the book? & I think your writing's fine for a beginner, people shouldn't be so mean when they post comments here, especially as this book was free to download. Happy holidays & best wishes for 2017.
how do you that over the 18 to stop coming up on me