BookRix

It is difficult to offer you any advice on your writing. While the story is easy to understand your choice of words and way of assembling them are not customary. It is because English is not your first language. That means different things both positive and negative. On the positive side it lends authenticity to your work. I find it quaint and agreeable. But for many English speaking readers it will be difficult to understand customs and situations they are not familiar with. I think you express yourself well I wish you much success in your writings.