Some grammatical errors to clear up but easily accomplished with a quick edit. Perhaps a trifle over dramatic but well thought out as a beginning. What you do with the tale is the next part of the story. Please do keep working on it as I see real promise in this effort.
I like this! Continue this way, I've favorited it. Mind checking mine and perhaps favoriting them?
Thanks chu! Im planning on updating today or tommorow. And sure no problem!
Thanks!!!
Nuu problem!!
Thank you for your feedback. :D i really appreciate it.