A very nice book with a goos=d story and a true message. It read well and I think that teens will love this as they can idetify witht he characters, I read everything that was online and want to see more of your work. Keep it up.
I sent a grading also.
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thank you so much! im so glad you liked it and thank you for voting! i cant wait to upload the rest!
thank you very much for your comment and i very much appreciate your help, thats the kind of help im always looking for and am so glad for your pointers thanks again!
You have a great idea for a story. It's very imaginative and different from others.
I would recommend that the use of words making noises be changed. These words are ring ring ring, beep beep beep etc. If you use these sparingly it would help with the uniqueness of your story. I make these comments as a tool to help make your story better. You have a good start and I will vote for your imagination./joeparente
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hello thankyou for your comment and i will deffinately add more, as i have finally completed the story! thanks again and i hope you read it once ive posted it! :)
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