Let me know when you have added more....Sounds wonderful so far.....
Okay now I want to ride a train with my Howard the pencil, eating a bowl of very vanilla ice cream....Your old man is how I try to be. Have you been stalking me. Or maybe you did watch your dad, after all.
He is based loosely on my dad, however, my dad isn't that old yet :)
This is the first story I have read of yours and I am very impressed. You caught my attention from the start and held it all the way through. I enjoy character studies and this was excellent. Your writing is quite superior to most. I shall look forward to reading more of this.
Thanks Val - I appreciate the kind words - There is a little of myself in this story, which is something I like to steer clear of at all costs in my other writing. I'm hoping to make the second part from the perspective of the old man - I also love character studies :)
I say go with the new style. Well, at least finish this story. It's an enjoyable, sad read and your words painted her emotions so realistically. I liked it.
Thanks Tanya - I think maybe I have several styles contained within my brain, so I think I'll stick with it for this particular story - although I mainly prefer writing something with humorous undertones :)
I read this and like Valerie says you got the gift , I did not know you write stories , if I was you I would think on this and see what I could up with for the rest of the story... as I read it was as if I was seeing threw the young girl mind, very very GOOD Rebecca, Your friend Stanley McQueen
Thank you very much Stanley!