Is there more? You should write a series on Blue and her friends. I can see it now... 'Blue lays stranded on the sandy beach. 5 more minutes and she will die. Then, suddenly River erupts from the blue water! Will he save Blue or stay loyal to Marina?'
Claire
So cute! I liked reading it :)
I do, however, have some critiques:
First off, the back round is battling with your chosen font and color of text. Either change the back round or the color of the words. I am distracted by the shimmering water on the pages!
Also, there are several instances when you forgot to put in a comma. I'd advise you to go back over the whole story yourself and put everything in order.
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I adore mermaids. The story begins with an interesting hook that can prompt readers to read more. Expecting to read the most interesting incidents in the world of mermaids. Please write more for this story can be developed into a beautiful story of mermaids.
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