make the kid have bad ass powers that would be flipping cool
The story itself was good but some parts were a little confusing I think u should go back and describe the story some more
its a great book but it sounded a bit like you rushed through it
its a great book but it sounded a bit like you rushed through it
its a great book but it sounded a bit like you rushed through it
I liked it. However, the grammar, spelling, and punctuation are off. Please finish writing it. If you need an editor, I would be happy to help.
This story's plot line is quite puzzling. There is also a lot of grammatical/spelling errors, and just a lot of things that don't make sense. It's not that the story's bad, but it's just so confusing to the point where it makes readers lose faith in the story.
it was realy good but some things were abit mugled up if you get what i mean but just one thing how did bella turn into a vampire because ime not shore it said but it was realy good and i think that you should write another about what edward has been up to i think it would be cool lol and then a therd about them meating up after so long and where are the were wolves doesnt matter all together it was realy good and i hope you write another
And Bella was turned after renesma if that how you spell it and vampires can't give birth