It's been said that first works are often autobiographical! Yikes! I hope not in this case!!!!
Missyman is pretty much correct. It isn't precisely "reporting", but you were close. Check out your tense agreement as well as those little grammatical and punctuation errors, too. Really, easy fixes.
The great thing about The Robbery is the way in which you showed three young girls doing something very wrong without an apparent, good... Show more
It's been said that first works are often autobiographical! Yikes! I hope not in this case!!!!
Missyman is pretty much correct. It isn't precisely "reporting", but you were close. Check out your tense agreement as well as those little grammatical and punctuation errors, too. Really, easy fixes.
The great thing about The Robbery is the way in which you showed three young girls doing something very wrong without an apparent, good motive. It hit me as quite real and absolutely plausible. So, it is a slice-of-life portrait, and that is SO interesting to read.
Kudos:)