BookRix

I'm 71! I am NOT less than18!

GRAMMER ERRORS

finish please!

it was very confusing with no seperation of paragraphs and it should not be x rated

THIS STORY HAD A LOT OF POTENTIAL, BUT YOUR SPELLING, PUNCTUATION & NO SEPARATION OF PARAGRAPHS, IT MADE IT VERY HARD TO READ. I THINK YOU SHOULD GET SOME HELP ON THIS STORY AND RESUBMIT IT.

THIS STORY MAY HAVE HAD some potential but the grammar is poor,and spelling is a mess! Who doesn't use spell check? And then you refer to college, well if they're allowing this in any college no wonder the US is at the bottom for education

THIS STORY MAY HAVE HAD some potential but the grammar is poor,and spelling is a mess! Who doesn't use spell check? And then you refer to college, well if they're allowing this in any college no wonder the US is at the bottom for education

made no sense. it was really great but you need some punctuation i kind of got mixed up. u should write more