They're Going To Die

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User: prandall
They're Going To Die
Bad kids, bad parents, a dark closet, strange noises, and a pile of clothing ... what could possibly happen?
This was my entry in the "Beat the Clock" contest. The first paragraph (modified slightly) was provided by Serious Writers.

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Deleted User

I had to take a second read at this one because I just did not get the very ending. I find your creativity to be quite distinct as I find all of your stories I have read so far have quite a different and odd quality about them. But I like that; the stories, as this story, stands out and is ever so interesting.

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prandall

Thanks James... I appreciate the comments. Sometimes it's good to be odd.

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Glynis Rankin

OH WOW!
Ain't it always so, you have got to watch those little one's all the time.

Man, read this last night and I couldn't sleep, didn't see that coming!

Great Job! Wonderful story!

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Deleted User

Hi, this story had a feeling of a screenplay to it. Your writing is excellent and I felt like I had watched a short horror movie in the end.

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judycolella

Woah. Dang. Another slam-dunk, Preston. That ending one of those shoulda-seen-it-coming-but-didn't-want-to things. You, sir, are impressive!

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r16ckelemen

if your going for a Chill you got it. The only thing i suggest is deepen your discriptions on the characterts the dads good though.

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usmcgunny

Preston!

What can I say? Makes me think how sad, and yet makes me wonder? This one will stay with me for a while.

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lenora.books

Wow, bad kids, bad parents is right! I'm ashamed to admit (sort of), that I enjoyed that ending. Bad seeds! Good job Preston.

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