This presents a fascinating glimpse into a world quite different from the American experience, yet touches beautifully on the aspects of growing up common to all youth, regardless of ethnicity, geography, or culture. I look forward to learning what becomes of the little lawyer.
The only suggestion I would make is that because the reader, knowing the author is male, may assume as I did that the narrator of that story is also a... Show more
This presents a fascinating glimpse into a world quite different from the American experience, yet touches beautifully on the aspects of growing up common to all youth, regardless of ethnicity, geography, or culture. I look forward to learning what becomes of the little lawyer.
The only suggestion I would make is that because the reader, knowing the author is male, may assume as I did that the narrator of that story is also a man until the moment the youngster says, "Auntie," perhaps you could identify the speaker as a woman at the beginning. Other than that, though, this is a well-constructed story that has the flavor of one of Aesop's fables, an education for old and young alike wrapped up in the persons of the narrator and the "little lawyer."
Marvelous!
Thank you once again for reading and giving a constructive comment. Will revisit and revise the identity of the narrator as suggested. Kind regards!
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