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i download this book
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I love your story line it has great potential a couple things though, You seem to be explaining things to fast try and slow down add a bit more decscription. Check your grammar and spelling. Just a tip words like smell dont sound so great try scent or essence they tend to sound more vampiric. I had a friend tell me that little tip. Otherwise wonderful please keep me posted when you write more I greatly enjoyed it
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Arya
I agree with you and it would be great if it you continue your book. ^^)