BookRix

ok i like the ideals of how he can pause and rewind time..confusing for the most part but very good concept

Yes it is rather strange. and I have a feeling it is going to be strange for a while.

I've never written a story like this and I'm having a difficult time making it come together.

although i'm still not sure what's going on!

Thank's for the corrections and your input. I've been brainstorming like mad over the last two days. Hope to have at least a chapter up by the end of this week.

Thanks again.

page one there are a few typos.

"particularly exiting" you left an c out. "exciting"

"damsel in distressed" take off ed. "distress"

Now the story. You captured my attention with it. It's far from ordinary and I do hope you'll add more. There are lots of things he could be and the others gave you good ideas. I really would like to read more of it.

That's gives me something to think about. I don't want to take anyones idea but they are all helping me build a story in my mind.

I think there is going to be a lot of mystery. Should be fun.

Thank again you for your input.

I really like this!
Here's some sort of an idea: maybe once a month or something he could experience the same thing over and over (the whole drunk, getting attacked thing) and the reason for the repetition would be for him to discover who that person(or other John Doe) is. Maybe the fight he breaks up is an event or something that will happen in his future and he has to work to prevent it? I don't know... just an idea! Good luck with the rest of the story... let me know when you update it!
-Jenna

I hope I can figure out why the stranger said that too. I like what Laverybrown mentioned but I'm going to have to play around with it I guess.

I wasn't prepared for this story. It literally came from left field and now I have to figure it out.

Thank again

My kind of story. Ones with a twist to them. Need to know more as to why the stranger said what he said.

Thanks you. It's nice to pick at other people brains. You're description does get the brain thinking. I'll keep working on it.

Thanks again