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Omg i loved this book u need to keep going and adding to it its gotten to me like gluei just cant get away frome it ive read it 4 times now in the last week i love it so much

It was really interesting. I liked it alot :)

Very interesting. In the beginning the poetic prose was so thick I got overwhelmed by the adjectives. However the scenic view was colorful and beautiful at the same time. Well done. I enjoyed delving into a fantastic nether world. As time went on the dialog had the perfect grounding effect to draw me in and keep the me interested. The sex scene seemed shortened and could have used a few more words so that the reader could see full and total movement, but overall I understood what you were revealing. Writing sex scenes wears me out - I suppose from all the detail.
The name Luca is also a beautiful name but Aries... I have never known an Aries to be weak. They are so fiery and confrontational and easily butt heads, and make good lovers. The name also holds reference to Ares and Aphrodite. Ares is the God of War and would never assume weakness, even in death.
I like this book and the direction it is going.
Is there any chance you could take a look at my book Taylor Made. My style of writing is tight and to the point. I wish I had your poetic prose but just the same I do write romantic novels with a masculine flare. It is perhaps like Grace Kelly in To Catch a Thief.
Thanks, Kathi

In general this seems much more professional than a lot of books that I have seen on bookrix, I enjoyed what I read so far, so I will favorite it and try and get back to it when I have the time. Nonetheless there are still some recommendations I can make that you can do with as you please:
1. On page 3 this sentence caused me to stop reading for a second and read it again:
Earth became more a battlefront, than a possible chance of Absolution for the Damned.
I think this is either due to the comma or the fact that it could also work with then: Earth became more of a battlefront, and then a possible a possible chance of Absolution for the Damned. Changes were made to the sentence to make it sound better, but they were minor. In my opinion you should rewrite this sentence to something like: Earth became a battlefront, rather than a possible chance of Absolution for the Damned. This requires the least change, but makes the meaning very clear.
2. Second, I am uncertain about what the prologue adds to the story. It is a large chunk of narrative summary that explains a lot of what should be made clear throughout the story, if it is relevant in the first place. Otherwise there is no need to talk about it anyways. Narrative summary is easy to write and overused by many writers, though it is always needed in parts, I don't think it's good to have it start the story. The first few pages should do the best that they can to draw your readers in.
Lastly, I have a question. This isn't judgment in any way, just curiosity. Why angels? I have seen a lot of this on BookRix, so I am wondering why so many writers like using them in their stories. Was there some popular book including them that I am unaware of? Is it inspiration from religion or the big old bible?