BookRix

I wanted to check out your book about Frankenstein but nothing was there but "sorry". Let me know when you have it written, it sounds interesting....

This is what I'm expecting from my readers, to speack out their opinions about my work. This way I can judge myself as a writer, how good or bad I am at some points.

If I had never heard of Frankenstein, I would've been completely bewildered and on edge as I read. And I still am, just a tad. I mean, I can assume who this mysterious Dr. F is, but I can't be too sure ;) So great job on the suspense!

Also, you have a unique way of spacing out the dialogue. It was ok at first, but towards the end of the first chapter, I got confused and couldn't tell if someone was speaking(a character telling the audience something) or if the narrator was talking. So maybe you could find a way to define the dialogue more sharply.

But I like the story. And I don't think it's necessary for you to have your characters(or narrator) curse(using the b-word, etc.). When I read a book and come across a word like this, most respect for the author dwindles down to less than half of when I started reading. I know that there are many words that could replace a curse word and have a much stronger effect. But, not everyone feels this way. We all have our opinions ;)

Otherwise, this is great! Just enough on the serious side to allow the bits of cartoonish funnies that pop in :)

Great job!
Keep writing!

---RbG