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Nice love story.

The story is very sweet - I enjoy a good love story, and this one starts with the kind of action that makes you want to keep reading.

There are a lot of errors in terms of tense, person, spelling and grammar that make it a little difficult to tell at times who is talking and who is responding. These are all minor, though, and can be easily fixed. For instance, all the places where you shift from the first person to the third person in the same sentence (the word "I" suddenly becomes "he," for instance) all you have to do is decide if you want to keep it in first person. If you do, just change the "he" references into "I" and - ta-da! Fixed! Stuff like that.

Your characters are endearing, and I can't wait to see how you develop both them and the story!