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I had to be careful there at the end to figure it out, but as it cleared in my head, I said "Wow...nicely done twist."
Agree on those typos, but overall, a great little story. I DO so love the tragedies:)
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as everyone has said a few typos, but i really enjoy your style, thanks for a fantastic read
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Gripping! You drew us in to a comfortable soothing spot then assaulted our eyes with ...no, I won't spoil it.
In your rush to get this uploaded you did miss a few errors. If you would like I can point them out. If you read it again I'm sure you can fine them.
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