"Fae" is spelled "fey." Unless you made these creatures up from scratch, in which case I have no business telling you what's what.
...Why not try to perfect this? Or any other of your stories. Go through the writer's method that I'm sure your English teachers have always tried to impress upon you. Treat this story as a first draft, proofread it, and apply corrections. Edit and add to it as necessary. I know I would love to give a second opinion after you've reposted it with whatever changes you make. I think it will help your progression.
Well this had a very dynamic beginning, especially with Lucian begging his sister not to marry him off. But you might want to read this over and edit out your typos. In the first page, there are a few redundancies, especially with the world dear. Also on the third page it should have been "his need to be drunk" instead of "his needsto be drunk".
Also check your punctuation, in the second page, a few periods and commas are... Show more
