BookRix

Your books are really good. I can only recommend

thank you that means a lot to me, i guess that totally right, i got to improve my writing skills and read more. I used to talk fluently but writing is a bit harder than i thought it would be...:)

First of all your story is scarry, I don't know how you come up with that.
But more importantly you need some serious editing here. I know English is your second language, so don't lose hope, I traveled down the same road. It takes alot of time and dilligence to write a book, but it takes even more to write one in another language. I have the feeling that you wrote the story in your own language and then tried to translate it. Try to go straight to English and just keep it in terms you know well. With some time and practice, and maybe some helpful english speaking bookrix friends, you can polish your work to get the language right :)
Like I said don't lose hope it takes some time but it is definitly worth it :)
I wish you the best, and I really liked your story despite its brutality ;)