The Flaming Arrow with the Emerald Green Eyes

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bluemask
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The Flaming Arrow with the Emerald Green Eyes
Pete Taylord is a fierce, merciless pirate who regularly travels the seven seas to plunder merchant vessels. On one such occasions he discovers a young lady aboard a ship and can't seem to take his mind off her. Can this beauty with the emerald green eyes steal the heart of the notorious pirate of 'The Flaming Arrow'?

  • Adventure
  • 2535 Words
  • Ages 0 and up
  • 1417
  • 34
  • Publication Date: 09-25-2010
Keywords: 
Adventure, Pirates
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the one who writes
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the one who writes

Well written however try not to assosiate medieval things with modern things also check out my book.The Crimson sea

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peacedance
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peacedance

As much as possible change the past perfect tense (had, have) to just the past tense. It's a little thing but it helps the reader flow through the story better.

halie.rooks
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halie.rooks

I like the book. I think you should continue writting and make it a novel.

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