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Good story, what happens next x

good book.. wish u read his book too what i told about in your pesonal inbox

A wonderful story, well-penned and artfully woven. you got my vote.Wish you all the best for the contest.

Oh Margarita, what a story you have woven with lovely words! And yes, there were places where you needed to separate conversations, but this did not deter my enjoyment. And yes, sometimes the words needed to be in a different tense, yet again, these instances did not lessen my desire to continue to read. You wrote in your own style, with your own voice, and we saw your soul. Your story is lovely, and so very charming in its unique stylized unfolding. Wa do, Elizabeth

Very interesting story. Sometimes when I feel get to feeling sorry for myself in this relatively easy life I have, I need a reminder of what others have gone through or are going through. I believe you have a great story here that could very easily be lengthened into a novel. It has the potential to make readers feel and this is very important. A lot of stories are good and even well written, but if they fail to engage with a reader's emotions, then it is likely they will fail.
Short stories are the best way to develope your writing talents and learn the do's and don'ts about grammar and punctuation and tense, but once you have fine tuned these skills I would very much like to see this story fleshed out. Thanks for putting it up and all the best to you in this contest. I'm giving you a vote even though I also have one entered. If you get a minute I'd love to hear what you have to say. It's called Nana's Love. Thanks for the good read.

''Why am I losing someone that I love?''
The book is wonderful,its compact structure and its narrative velocity are so perfectly contrived ....
You got my vote.

Hi Margarita,

Firstly, I wanted to say what an interesting front cover you've chosen for Mauricia. Did you draw this yourself?

I liked your story very much. Your mother had a hard time.

Good luck.

Bek

Hi .I read your book and thought it was well worth the read. Some sentence structure revisions area possibility, especially to keep the same presence of time. This, however did not loose me in the story. You did a good story and i enjoyed it./joeparente Please read (If you haven't)
"WHITE DOWN" and "DEER ELK: LETTER".
http://www.bookrix.com/-joeparente
There is also a short story called "THE RECIPE". I hope you have time
to check them out./joe

Good story, kept me turning the pages. What happens next? Would be better if you separated out the dialogue (each person speaking should be a separate paragraph).

I learn something new everyday! Thank you for pointing that out to me.