Three Matchsticks

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Three Matchsticks
Three matchstick drabbles, intended to be read by the time the flame stubs out. How to deal with loss, why we never see foxes in the day time and train journeys home.

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felixthecat

First off, a very interesting and inviting title. I sensed as I read them an avante-garde approach, and I must agree with mosey of the comments posted. #3 situated me quickly into a definite scene, with clear caracterizations and pithy observations by your narrator. Certainly, in my estimation, the best of the three. Very nice indeed.

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lazarus67

I too liked the last one, not complicated and besides, I could easily relate to that one.

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prandall

Have to generally agree with RobbedbyGreed; one and two seemed a bit obscure although there were still some interesting images. But the last one had a consistent theme and flow that was excellent.

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robbedbygreed

You have a very unique voice in your writing. Very good.

However, your thoughts are all over the place, making it very hard for your reader to understand the point your trying to get across.

The first drabble completely overwhelmed me, as I could barely understand what was written, though I did get a sense of dread and hopelessness when reading it.

The second was better, much clear than the first, but still a bit jumbled.

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