i think it's good,but a little sudden don't you think. you have to work up to a big event like that.like how he might've boon acting weird,a nd that maybe he overheard him on his cell phone taliking about some shocking things and ect.also i don't get the title.;)
lol.. nice description and imagination with the jelly sidewalks.. Deathnote was in there!!
a note:
CONSTRUCTIVE FEEDBACK IS GREATLY APPRECIATED :D
Thank you! This is my first book and I'm not too experienced so it means a lot to me!
PS: My name is Grace, too. THE IRONY xD
I can't believe this creation is on bookrix! I am absolutely FASCINATED by your style of writing.
It's lyrical and musical, perhaps fairylike.
You kind of remind me of my friend Grace..
Anyways, I'm new on bookrix!
UPDATE SOON!!
-Annalee W.
