Your story is delightful and wonderful for a child of any age to read. When I started reading I supposed that Theodore was a bum living in the alley and dining like so many do these days from the restaurant dumpsters. Looking back over the story I saw where you said he had been thrown out, and that should have been my first clue that you were not talking about a person. The ending was a surprise, and I chose the first ending.... Show more
Your story is delightful and wonderful for a child of any age to read. When I started reading I supposed that Theodore was a bum living in the alley and dining like so many do these days from the restaurant dumpsters. Looking back over the story I saw where you said he had been thrown out, and that should have been my first clue that you were not talking about a person. The ending was a surprise, and I chose the first ending. It wasn’t clear how long Theodore sat there in the alley before Alexandra found him, but I assumed they had just left. I questioned if the restaurant would throw him out or would they put him in the lost and found?
Alternate ending#2 seemed a little unbelievable. I don’t care how cute he was he was with all the trash, and the mother (in us females) couldn’t be sure what kind of germs he might harbor. Since I go to all kinds of thrift stores there are certain items I will not buy, and children’s soft toys are among them. I am not a germophobe even the people who work in these stores wear gloves, lol. If I find it at a garage sale, that’s a different thing. I can see the homes and the people selling them, and they would go in a washer with the hottest water when I got it home. On page 8 As they passed the lane behind the row of restaurants, (I added the s), Sam, her Schnauzer ( I think I would capitalize the breed name) took off and ran behind the pile(here can you use line or row ) of trash cans.
Alternate ending #3 Joe was doing his rounds that evening, as he had being (been) doing for the last several years around the same time every night. There was a lot (I think I would choose to use a lot since you use lots again in the next sentence) of food to be found behind the fine bistros. Here I go again, but how many shelters would accept a teddy bear from a bum? Neither one of them would be very presentable. I did like the idea it was sweet of him to think of the shelter and the children missing their toys.
Now that I said all of that I always enjoy reading your stories and poetry. I only found a few minor spelling errors that seem to slip by all of us. I would recommend your story to others. Good job.
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