They say you should be happy with yourself. Well, pooey on that. We are social creatures and need affection. This story has got to be Every human's dream come true. This story is so well written. It is a tender Love story that is not far fetched. I love the way you've captured and expressed the the emotions of these two people. You have given me hope that I too may one day find true Love and not to be just arm candy for some... Show more
Thoroughly enjoyed it. Refreshing as it keeps the reader turning the page.
One small question - Where is Jessica when you go over to Raven's?
Not to be critical but maybe the following would enhance your script.
I can't help feeling eyes on me
Would I be too bold if I invited you to my place
After having eaten enough to merit the loosening of my belt
...before I stepped into something similar to the last eight years
Thanks..Jessica is with her mother. She only visits her dad every so often.
Laz