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please update its so good!!!!

you hav to update it!! its amzing

Nice car! :)

Plz update soon!

The idea of a street racer is pretty cool, but I think you need to show the main character actually racing to show how awesome she is. It's show vs. tell.

Here's some advice from Maria V Snyder, author of the Poison Study series:

A common writing mistake is to tell the reader the events of a story or tell the reader how a character is feeling. Journalism is an acceptable method of telling, of presenting the facts, but fiction creates the illusion of being there in the story, seeing events happen without the writer telling you.

For example:

Valek was angry. (Telling)

"Valek took a gray rock off his desk and hurled it toward me. Stunned, I froze as the stone whizzed past and exploded on the wall behind me." (Showing)

There are five techniques a fiction writer can use to avoid telling the reader:

Using Point of View (POV)
Using dialogue
Using all the senses
Using picture nouns and action verbs
Writing in scenes

http://www.mariavsnyder.com/advice/showvstell.php

I hope this helps

plz update it's really good!

Please continue! You are a great writer!
xoxoxoxo

more!

Great job!! Please let me know when you update, I can tell that it will be a GREAT story if you keep writing! xoxo
Eva

time writing a book i think that's a pretty good start. you know you have great ideas but there are a few errors if you correct them then i don't know why you won't get more fans.and one more thing write more, not like a summary if you understand what i mean.
other than that i LOVE this book. well done. can't wait for more^_^