I like it. I already want Effie and James to become an item. :) Definitely continue this. The one thing I'd point out is that you start in the past tense and switch to the present. It caused a slight hiccup in my reading, but that's an easy fix. Overall, I'd love to read more.
I think you have some real promise here. you are definitely a talent in writing with imagination. I am looking forward to reading the rest./joeparente you have a vote from me.
Read: "FAILING WELL"
Your voice and narrative style are unique; exceptional. I enjoyed EVERYTHING except the green flames at the tops of the pages that made reading somewhat difficult :)
It is a great read so far, I love that its about witches and a different take on that genre. It was very interesting keep it up! :)
-SelishXIII
Sorry for such a late reply...but I'm going to hopefully start writing more soon. I've had a very long period of writers block!