I enjoyed reading your story and am looking forward to seeing more of your work. It was an exciting story, with a great ending.
Contrary to other beliefs, the grammer doesn't make the writer. I know writers with great grammer, but their stories are awful. My grammer is pretty bad, and most who read my work enjoy it anyway.
I'm in agreement with some of the other comments -- this is a killer story with a unique angle on it that would benefit greatly from good editing.
Contrary to popular opinion, you don't have to be a master of grammar to be a great writer. It certainly helps, and it'll make your writing process easier, but in the meantime just find a good editor to work with.
i enjoyed this book just as eveyone else has. loved it. hope you do second version of this one soon.
I applaud the direction you took with this 1 it's not common for one to attempt to link espionage and possession- truly creative.
However I feel at many points during the story it's almost like you got so caught up in the magic of it all that you forgot to keep your thoughts in tune.
Tenses and spellings as well as sentence construction is a bit lacking. An improvement in that area will put you in a league of your own.
im shocked this is one one the best books i have ever read really good.u should write annother book
I liked this story. Especialy the subject. It almost made me cry. I love it when a book can do that.
Thank you for your feedback. Well, it was my first story, so I might have gotten a little too excited while writing it. And yeah, screw my English grammar, it lacks BIG time. However, I'm on my way to improve it :)
Got to do my final exams for it next spring, and I'm hoping for some good results ^^