I'm halfway through with this haha and its very interesting. You are amazing at making details and letting the reader visualize it perfectly. My laptop is going to die soon so I will finish the story later and tell you what I think on the rest :)
the only thing that I found that was missing was what the characters look like, blonde hair? brown? Unless I missed it you should add that, I think other than that you have done a great job...
Add more and make sure you make some action pop more :)
Shellia....You know who I am : P
This was done very well. I think a few grammar corrections and you will have a great story....Please let me know when you write more...
I think you having something here, I would love to know what happens to Emerald...