I like how he always travels around and how the end is sort of like mysterious
homerunreynolds
This was pretty cool! I definitely see alot of you in your writing. ^_^ Great job and good luck!
kinda has a mixed feel of 1984,breakfast of champions and metamorphosis... )
I enjoyed it! At times I felt it a bit hard to follow but then I could get back it to the story line. All in all Good work!! =)
Jon, I very much liked ur story. You could have combined a lot of sentences so it doesnt sound repetitive with word usage and there were a few grammatical errors but all-in-all, great story.
Loved the story and it brought memories. maybe I traveled back when i read it!./joeparente
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