You are definitely growing as a writer. The story shows a new side of Vampires one does not read often. Well done/joeparente
I could see the monster taking control. both physically and mentally. Great read.
We must have been commenting at the same time! LOL After I posted, I read your comment to rvkenr and you addressed exactly what I was mentioning. Good for you! I love it when an author takes a suggestion on their work to heart and works on improving. You are going to be a great writer! Robynn
Reveiw - Started out with a great hook. The wondering. Then you build the story well. What makes a story is: A beginning, (the thought) the middle (explanation of that thought) the end (conclusion of that thought). I was confused in this one. You started with his musings of the difference between him and the beast. Then you did an excellent job of showing us the difference. But, what was the ending? Unless it was the fact he... Show more
I had originally intended for this to be the end. However I realize that I haven't ended it. A friend read it for me and said there was no ending.
I thought I'd leave the story open, but the truth is it's too open. I am going to consider writing more. I'm not sure how much more at this point, but I am considering writing at least one more story to end it properly.