You describe characters extremely well.
It may be the American way, but some of your sentences sound incomplete and the exclusion of certain words led to confusion.
These may be "typos" though.
Your lack of punctuation was in parts, misleading.
Despite these nitpicks your story read well.
Best of luck with this.
Cauldar.
The entire story was sent edited to the powers to be with the corrections made. Thank you for your comments./joe
Congrats on getting into the top 10! I tried to Tweet your book but it doesn't show on your botton for some reason. Again, CONGRATS!!!
I appreciate your comment.joeparente
Great book. Liked how you designed it. Great for a one sit read.
Great start cant wait to read the rest!
A fantastic book that I loved to read...just wanted to congratulate you on your place in the finals and wish you the best:)
-S.XIII
Thanks Selish!
Congrats, Joe! Now the nail-biting begins:)
Best,
Patrick
When I first read this portion I was seriously intrigued! It is very eery how we are all connected in small ways, such as the diner connects the people in your story. I want to send out my congrats and good wishes!
~mf Harris
And the same to you,Marsha. Congratulations!
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