This is a very moving tale. It causes mixed emotions to stir within the reader. Your depiction of the pedophile sounds like an accurate assessment of their stalking of a child. Part of the reader says, "Yes, get this monster." The other part says, "No, don't become a killer yourself." You have a talent for evoking an emotional response with so few words.
You should expand this into a short story - it's really well written and from an interesting perspective!
You write very well, clean and polished. Nice work.
These three stories COULD stand alone, although together they more effectively constitue a full story. Each has splendid grammar, flow, and tension...the last, however, is the "dot-on-the-i".
Well done, and that said with a vote.
I reread the instructions as well as the conditions of the contest. I can only see where it says each book has three SEPERATE drabbles of 100 words each. Though both my entries can be considered a whole story, if you broke them apart, the drabbles themselves are still seperate entries; they'd still be able to stand on their own. I don't know if that still applies, at least I hope it does but if you saw something else in the... Show more
I found it taut and compelling, but I'm not sure it fits the definition of this contest - 3 stand-alone stories of 100 words each. If someone can clarify that it fits the criteria, you've got my vote!
