the title really spoke to me and as I read the blurb I like the title even more. You described the story as an unwanted gift, something that wasn't good for the main character, and you see in swedish the word for poison is gift.
but since I do feel you have something going here I am going to be a little harsh, only for your own good:
You need to fix your text structure, it is so messy right now that I could hardly focus on... Show more
the title really spoke to me and as I read the blurb I like the title even more. You described the story as an unwanted gift, something that wasn't good for the main character, and you see in swedish the word for poison is gift.
but since I do feel you have something going here I am going to be a little harsh, only for your own good:
You need to fix your text structure, it is so messy right now that I could hardly focus on the content. Describe more, go deeper, right now the text is kinda superficial and if you're going to write a whole book that is going to be less interesting, it is fine to do short chapters, you don't even have to have chapters if you don't like that but you're going to have to go deeper.
With some editing I think this could be great!
Keep it up!
thanks for the advice. i appreciate it ill try harder and see what happens! :-)