I absolutely loved this book. It would be very neat if you had the next book feature Scarlets' life. Maybe even get Scarlet to get the dragons and 'Dark Ones' to be friendly.
Now, you need to go back and edit. I had to learn my mistake after I had already started selling. Find someone who will help and do it chapter by chapter within a group...
You have several similar kind of mistakes, when in a conversation "...... ," you need the comma if the sentence does not end. Many times you put a period where a comma should be.
Some of your sentences are fragmented.
I did enjoy the theme and tone of the book.
I know. I'm 16 now and I was like, 13 when I wrote this.
I loved it so much. You really should make a sequel to this. (:
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awwiieee thats so sad that she died i kinda wished she didnt die though