each one is interesting and tells a story, but aren't confusing even though they are somewhat abstract. the last two could totally be read to beat music in a candle lit room in the style of John Cooper Clarke's "Evidently Chickentown" (check it out on youtube).
vigilanttoneful,
These three drabbles are interesting and intense.
Good writing!
but if I'm correct -great - I thought all three dabbles were intense but that is the nature of psychotic behavior. The first I thought was PTS, the second, Masochism, and the third manic/depressive.
I hope you're only studying these behaviors, not experiencing.
I think this contest was too restrictive. It's impossible to fail at self expression, but I clearly am incapable of writing an appealing...story, or whatever this turned out to be, in this medium. I hope everyone who reads this doesn't lose faith in me and checks out my mystery contest entry, which I have much more faith in, on the 5th of July 2012
I like the concept, but three different perspectives should have thee different voices.
Also in #2, don't censor yourself. If you're going to write something, write it. If you don't want to write it, don't.
You've got a good start here.
At your request I read your drabbles. They were intense, although I am not certain I truly understood what was going on. To be honest, unless I "get" what is happening - as I am sure other readers will agree - I am left hanging. But then again, it might be me -- so I would not be too concerned about what I think.
As I said - intense and filled with "something" - I wish you the best with these.
you got it in one ...umm...three.
That was a startling finish to your start ... in this medium.. good job.
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