BookRix

I love this story and would love to read this in a full-length book! Awesome work JC!!

I really like this story. Your writing style and detailed descriptions kept me engaged from beginning to end. I love classic or well-known stories told from a different perspective. It's easy to think of an antagonist as two dimensional, just evil. It's interesting to look from his perspective and see the third dimension; his life experiences and motivations. You created an interesting character that elicits empathy from the reader. Truly impressive storytelling.

I was really delighted when I began reading this tale set in the ancient middle east. Your powers of description are so sharp, and the way you easily give your characters life in the locale you've chosen for them is impressive.

So, so interesting, this different perspective telling of a tale we've all heard so many times. Made me smile when I read it, and when I finally figured out just who this Malek was. I actually LIKED him!

Another John Laird gem. Congrats!

Magnificent. Seeing this from the Philistine's point of view, giving him a life, a personality, makes this unique.

As always, your skill as a writer is obvious, but in this work, it's absolutely breathtaking. I also enjoyed the details, like about the three stones chosen from the brook. This is the first retelling I've encounters that gives a satisfactory explanation of how the battle played out.

You missed a close-quote mark on either the last or next-to-last page, but that was it. Nothing, and I mean absolutely nothing else was amiss. The pace, the dialogue, the way you described the three scenes - perfection! Nothing too much, nothing too little, all of it compelling from start to finish.

I am in awe of this work and your artistry, sir. In awe. Thank you for sharing it with us (I almost added "mere mortals") - someone in the publishing world seriously needs to discover you.