Lost In The Jungle

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Lost In The Jungle
Amelia wakes up to find herself surrounded by trees and strange sounds. She did not know how she arrived at such a place, but now she must find her way back home to her her family and her best friend.

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RevkenR

It is a very interesting book. It does need a little editing, but not much. You have left some pronouns out from time to time in the story. If you re-read it I am sure you will see where. Like on page four in the second paragraph, last sentence

"It caught her off guard instantly and (she) stared in disbelief as it spoke to her."

Otherwise very good job.

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indie23

I will have a look through again and fix it when I get a chance. Thank You! :)

RevkenR

You are welcome. I enjoyed reading your book.

indie23

Thank You. I'll work on that.

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