I thought the story was good however the italic font should be changed. You have the possibility of a winning story and it should have been put in the contest. One has to look past the errors in English to understand the creative writing./joeparente
You have such a great imagination; I enjoyed the adventures of those four friends. I think this story has a great potential; with some polishing, can be a hit. Congrats, and keep writing!
It was really good as usual your work is always beyond what I except you should put it in the end of the world contest that's happening right now
Your imagination know no bounds. You are evolving as a story teller, there is no doubt. This is obviously an ongoing story. Would like to see how it ends. Though you can always improve and I think you know it is in grammar and punctuation, you still have come a long way from when I first read your work. I can tell you are working hard at it. Keep it up, your voice is shining through. Robynn
Need to work on your english dear..but a very good attempt considering that english is not your first language..so..keep it up..
Saving the world is a mammoth task and I'm wondering how it might be achieved. What I've read contains a magazine of ideas , an assortment of characters set out on a canvas but whether they gel in true storybook fashion remains to be seen.
On the editorial side there is much to be done. One error in punctuation can be repeated.
Keep writing and best wishes
Cleveland
