I read porcelaindoll's comment. Don't delete books because of grammar, or you won't learn what you need to fix. You have a few words that don't mean what you want them to mean. For example: 'threw the open door' needs to be 'through the open door'. Threw means throwing something.
True it does need eiting, but you're still very young and will learn growing up. The plot/story is amazing though and I would really love to see you... Show more
Hey I stopped by your page and stumbled across your book. I must say the title grabbed me right away and made me ask: "What's this?" So I took a peek and boy am I ever glad I did.
You have a powerful writing voice and immediately I was into the story and what was going to happen next. I love how you write in the 1st person and maintain that focus without shifting back and fro from 1st to 3rd.
Hope you are going to update and... Show more
Thank you so much!
This is amazing and I am not saying it because you are my friend. Please don't delete this one. Your grammar literally gets better and better with each book.
Thanks!
Porclaindoll(Because It Is...) and I are actually good friends in real life. We talk about books all the time, and I am learning. I mean I'm only in eighth grade. I didn't have the proper 4th grade education. I actually didn't learn any language or spelling in that grade, so I'm... Show more
Porclaindoll(Because It Is...) and I are actually good friends in real life. We talk about books all the time, and I am learning. I mean I'm only in eighth grade. I didn't have the proper 4th grade education. I actually didn't learn any language or spelling in that grade, so I'm kinda struggling on stuff like that. I'm apologizing now!
No need to apologize, wasn't critisizing or anything like that. I was more letting you understand that if you write something and someone reviews it, learn from those reviews, so you can edit the story and write it better then before rather than deleting/throwing it away.
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No need to apologize, wasn't critisizing or anything like that. I was more letting you understand that if you write something and someone reviews it, learn from those reviews, so you can edit the story and write it better then before rather than deleting/throwing it away.
Stories are written more than once. Sometimes, authors edit their stories for 5 or 6 times, before they get it polished to their satisfaction.
And as I also said, update soon/when you can, you got a great story here :).
I'm putting the book I deleted back up. It's not close of being finished, but this one isn't either. I will update both soon!