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write more please it is really good keep it up!

Thanks for the nice comments everyone! You have no idea how much these nice ideas mean to me. I promise to let you all know when I update it :)

You should write more it is really good.

It was really nice that you intermingled the story with flashes of memory, and some of your description was beautiful, like, "I could smell the chorline from the pool, the sweat on the people that had me..."
It gave me a really vivid image in my mind, and not many writers are able to do that.

There WERE a few spelling and grammar errors ('since' instead of 'sense' on page 10 for example) but that didn't detract from the gem of a story much at all. Nothing a little editing can't fix.

You should write more!!! It is a great book

This is a good book, you should write more.

Aelita2006, i am actually working on this and other books so the answer right now is i dont know. i'll make sure to message you when i put more up.

Are you going to write more? Becasue this book is really good!