A very touching piece. I can see the loss and feel the confusion,pain and almost hopeless distress that you've adopted as your voice. Very well done.
I have no critiques.
This poem is like a puzzle that the reader must unravel and put back together to be able to grasp its meaning. Yet, it is still simple and extremely easy to understand!
Bravo!
Amazing!
Keep Writing!
---RbG
Your words were good. What I really liked was how you simply nailed the ending.
wow, you made me speechless , so beautifully written
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