I have to say, the plot certainly sounds promising. I kept getting distracted by the grammatical errors, but i liked how you didn't tell me what Corneilus was. I assumed he was a werewolf. Not many supernatural creatures age and have biological parents. But, a suggestion: tone down the cussing. it detracts from the quality of the work. or, if you don't want to, then put up a warning about it. also, why did you bring in... Show more
I have to say, the plot certainly sounds promising. I kept getting distracted by the grammatical errors, but i liked how you didn't tell me what Corneilus was. I assumed he was a werewolf. Not many supernatural creatures age and have biological parents. But, a suggestion: tone down the cussing. it detracts from the quality of the work. or, if you don't want to, then put up a warning about it. also, why did you bring in Cornellia? From where I'm sitting, she seems to be an unimportant character. But the chase at the beginning was a good starting place; launch the readers into the panicked mind of the protagonist. it was a very nice hook.
thanks i will go back through and try to fix the grammar, also remove the cussing xD and camellia is not as important but plays a role with everything that's going on i have to write more ocne im int he right mind hopefully soon.
try keeping a notebook for this book with you. you can doddle out the characters, think up plot twists, chracter relationships, etc..without writing anything. it really helps. oh and i love RPing out a book with a friend. You both pick a character and just basically have a... Show more
try keeping a notebook for this book with you. you can doddle out the characters, think up plot twists, chracter relationships, etc..without writing anything. it really helps. oh and i love RPing out a book with a friend. You both pick a character and just basically have a conversation. you really develop the character and you get some writing done in the process! do you know how to RP? id be more than happy to help.
I i have never RP and not sure of what it is lol, but i will definately pick up a notebook or just bring my i pad with me so i can write throught the day. I am down to try RP though.
Its a little complicated but its pretty easy to remember everything.
To increase ease of understanding between the two parties, we use certain symbols for certain things. they are outlined below.
*Actions*
" Speaking"
{Thoughts}
( RPer to RPer conversation )
It starts off with both... Show more
Its a little complicated but its pretty easy to remember everything.
To increase ease of understanding between the two parties, we use certain symbols for certain things. they are outlined below.
*Actions*
" Speaking"
{Thoughts}
( RPer to RPer conversation )
It starts off with both parties picking their characters and designing them..after they decide on what genre.
NAME
AGE
GENDER
DESCRIPTION
BIO (Background)
PERSONALITY
then one of the RPer's introduces his/her character, and the other one responds to it. and so the RP goes on. RP is actually short for RolePlay, as in RolePlayingGame, RPG.