Compelling and a little too similar to most vampire stories. In the second half, why not tell me something about them I don't already know? That aside, I like it.
I think overall, the story was well written. You have a lot of spelling errors and I would recommend that you strengthen your vocabulary. Other than that, I think you did a great job. Keep up the good work.
I think overall, the story was well written. You have a lot of spelling errors and I would recommend that you strengthen your vocabulary. Other than that, I think you did a great job. Keep up the good work.
the story of Rose was really nice, well done :) It would be better, if you wouldn't repeat so many words that often. I'll hope, it would be continued soon. Kind regards, Bridget
