Thank you for the critique though I did describe the characters not quite sure what to do about that and yea I'm in the process of fixing the conversation flow as we speak I know it's a mess thanks again
I fixed that yesterday sometimes I write the first version of the word that comes to mind I guess I write how I read and Just go lol but yea I fixed it and the book is under major editing
Thank you amaris for the heart and I'll be fixing the errors no matter how many times I edit I miss a few of them : )
Alot of my book has changed just so you guy's know
For those of you who have given my book a heart I was hoping for your vote as well for FREAKED my entry in the Newbie contest PLEASE VOTE FOR ME IF YOU THINK I DESERVE IT thankyou : ) FINGERS CROSSED
I Up date everyday and edit as I go so excuse any small changes you happen to see I've changed the story line slightly since I started and want to make sure everything adds up just right. : enjoy and thanks for the heart.
lol I have to admit I am enjoying creating Starla's evil side.