Its like..whipe lash lol...almost, you have several times when there are run on sentences, about the 6th or so page it was one block of writing and i had to read it several times before i understood what u where trying to say. There are also several spelling errors As i said before I wasnt trying to be rude Just thought maybe you should be informed. I know how it is *sigh*. I have a question too, what is the protection on... Show more
I am not trying be harsh, or rude, but i am going to be frank, please dont take this the wrong way, but the beggining of the story is rather confusing. Please revise and edit. But i absolutly love the story line, it is very catching.