BookRix

This is a great jumping off point.

Don;t give up on it just because the contest will end.

Twist it away from the contest rules (afterwards) and make it the truly unique story you're leading us toward.

Keep it up!

Heart & vote for you!

You aare telling a story that in my opinion now needs to be written. You have storyline, but to make it real I suggest you make it into action scenes in combination with new reports. Listen to news reports and then read yours at the beginning. Keep writing

Thank you too for the comment!

Its good so far keep up the good work

Thank you for the comment!

Its good so far. ;)