The language and style here are intriguing, but I'm missing a clear message to stitch it all together. Perhaps you should try condensing your point into fewer words.
I'm impressed. May I ask, what's it about? I personally, think it's about a girl who has abused by the guy but the guy felt guilty.
Thank you! I will tell you it is about abuse, but I love the aspect of poetry that is up for interpretation, so I don't know if I want to tell you what I meant it to be about...
Wow, I'm impressed. This is very inspirational and sad.
yeah :) you have a great talent
Thank you so much. It's always great to hear that. It makes me feel like I'm actually doing something right! Haha.^-^
Well you are doing something right!!! Haha :))
I really love it you are really good at this. Good job<3
Thank you so so so much! A heart for a heart. <3
I don't know how you did it, but that was a great poem. It was easy to understand for people like me, but it still was... sophisticated? Unique? The bottom line is I liked it very much so. Keeping writing poems. :)
Thank you times a million! How could I stop writing poems with people like you who write such lovely compliments.(:
Wowzer. Honestly that was really freaking good. :D I don't get sad easily, but the poem tugged the heart strings. Speechless. Great job, can't wait to read your other books.
Thank you for such amazingly kind words!
Proud to be favorite #30. Haha. I enjoyed reading your intriguing poetry and I love the cover. Nice work and I think you should continue writing poetry. The only thing for me is that every couple of lines I think you should turn it into a stanza. The writing is fine if you leave it the way it is now but sometimes as a reader it can get distracting and confusing with all those lines bunched together.
But that's just my opinion.
~Jillian
Thanks for reading and I will definitely take you suggestion into consideration. I'm so glad you like it!
Your welcome (:
I know excautally ( really bad speller but im working on it.) what you mean and felt. I also had written a peom and my english teacher entered it into a contest. Don't know the results yet BUT reading your poem makes me want to put my poem on bookrix.
Thank you. And you should put it on bookrix! I'd love to read it.
Thanks for the tip. I'll see what I can do with it.(:
Good luck :]
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