BookRix

This sounds like a really good book

Me think you should have let the readers give you some pointers before you published this. Example:

... whether or not the other child heard her - This sentence needs a period instead of a comma at the end.

After a question/exclamation mark the period is dropped.

"Ladies," Cue loud sigh - Cue needs to be small letter since you have a comma. I would also have placed it after voices, at the end of the dialogue instead of the beginning.

Pg 3 is one whole paragraph even though there are different events going on.

Rushing to publish a book, especially if it's a first draft will damage an author on the outside markets. Better not to rush and make sure that at least if it's not great, it's good. Goodluck.

So even though the book was started on here..... We never got the full story, we now have to buy it on iTunes to finish it???

Any updates?????

Would love to continue reading. Please update.

Sometimes I think the writer has abandoned us.

i love this book its amazing!

Not bad, but pleas keep writing it would be sad to see the book go to waste.

Will u please wright more?

Amazing keep writing.