What the heck was this? So what, she marries him, gets pissed of like some eight-year-old and then has a baby which is black and she acts totally racist and then she gets killed by werewolf?
Gosh, girl. This is like the worst storyline ever.
I'm not even mentioning your grammar.
Soz, but the ending is just about as abrupt as the ending to Monty Python and the Holy Grail. Actually, the whole book was like that. Sorry, but this went by way too fast, with terrible grammar and events that made my head spin. I bet you are a much better author now, so try rewriting this! I bet you'll do an amazing job!
The grammar is HORRIBLE! I couldn't even get past the first page! Fix it please!
Well it doesn't make sense and the grammar is horrible. It needs some work... Or a lot but I know you can make it better.
You need work on grammar and spacing out words. The story runs to fast and it doesn't even flow.
Work on it.
I'll try to do the chapters and do as much work I can do to for the second chapter!! Stay Tuned...
There Will Be A Second Book And Maybe A Third Book.Stay Tuned....
From,
amazingreader
Ahaha you're so right :)